上主日，公理堂日堂詩班獻唱了John Rutter作品Look to the Day，在崇拜單張中夾附了歌詞及其中譯文（不能唱的，亦恕我認為那翻譯偏離了原來的詞意）。我以為可以比中譯文做多一點，就是若能把歌詞翻成合粵韻的中詞，那就更好了。主日前，我已把頭兩節翻了，並貼了在個人臉書上，今兒終把四節都完成了：

《張眼不遠見來日》

Words and Music by John Rutter – Hinshaw Music, Inc.
粵譯：海牛

參：http://www.jwpepper.com/sheet-music/media-player.jsp?&type=audio&productID=10065955

張眼不遠來日世界換一新
清朗早晨揚臂迎藍天
漫山土香栽出鮮花璀璨
閃耀著玉露光芒伴你信步行
寫意舒閑悠悠樂哉每一刻
佳果飽嚐沿路何其多
不再趕時匆忙　追尋可愛的夢
張眼不遠　能有日見
Look to the day when the world seems new again:
Morning so fresh you could touch the sky;
The earth smells sweet and ev’ry flower looks bright,
Shining in a dewy light as you wander by.
Taking the time to enjoy each moment;
Tasting the fruits spread along your way,
Knowing there’s time to spare, Dreams you can dream and share:
Look to the day, look to the day.

張眼不遠來日綠野定再見
春必歸來除盡寒夜凍
復甦生機之聲處處可聞
帶著不息的音韻進你的心坎
土裡深藏能再復生的種子
安靜堅強候大地回春
生成枝頭新芽　長成花蕾果兒
張眼不遠　田野共唱
Look to the day when the earth is green again:
Promise of spring after winter’s sleep.
The sounds of life returning fill the air,
Music that’s forever there for your heart to keep.
Deep in the earth lay the seed of life renewed,
Quiet and strong till the time of spring:
Life in each bud and shoot, Life in each flower and fruit,
Look to that day when earth shall sing.

終見光明會除盡黑漆陰影
希望終能平伏顫與驚
上主支撐我至戰鬥得勝
見證使命達與成就在這一天
深盼轉眼來日痛苦莫再有
悲傷憂愁過眼如雲煙
禱告終能得見　深信此期不遠
張眼不遠　能有日見
Look to the light that will drive out darkness;
Look to the hope that will conquer fear.
God’s strength uphold us till the fight is won,
Till we see our task is done when the day is here.
Look for that day when there shall be no more pain;
Sorrow and sighing shall pass away.
Pray for the day to come, Trust that the day will come,
Look to that day, look to the day.

感激主賜我眾氣息與安康
新種新苗求祢種我心
主啊使我得見　一切皆祢恩眷
張眼不遠　能有日見　能有日見　能見著祢
Lord, we give thanks for the gifts of life and health;
Plant a new seed in our hearts, we pray:
Help us to see, O Lord, How it could be, O Lord;
Look to the day, look to that day, look to the day, look to that day.

這一首應該已有中譯詞，但不確定是否協粵韻。昨天，自行做了這個譯詞：

《每天都開心》

Words and Music by unknown
粵譯：海牛

參：http://youtu.be/G0LPNtrp4n8

我入邊外邊上邊下邊
I’m inright outright upright downright
每天都開心
Happy all the time
我入邊外邊上邊下邊
I’m inright outright upright downright
每天都開心
Happy all the time
主活著在我心
Since Jesus Christ came in
祂抹去我罪污
And took away my sin
今我周身的每一邊都
I’m inright outright upright downright
天天感興奮
Happy all the time

此短詩的旋律有多個版本，我是參考下面這個：

兩個多月沒有譯過詩歌，是時候要復出喇！一來就要向難度挑戰！一直都很想重譯《恩光歌》，只覺這首兒童詩歌的旋律和節奏其實可以編成很rock的，唱起來蠻有勁。但要把dssssdrdtt這首句填得協音，實在超難！卒之弄了這個出來，略嫌文皺皺，但幾已耗盡海牛微末的功力。

《主要我們如光》

Words by Susan Bogert Warner
Music by Edwin Othello Excell
粵譯：海牛

參https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/81?

點起這燭火
發光潔又亮
主要我們如光
輝照夜半央
世間漆黑一片
待我光照
你我去朝自家
將真光照
Jesus bids us shine,
With a pure, clear light,
Like a little candle,
Burning in the night.
In this world is darkness,
So let us shine–
You in your small corner,
And I in mine.

點起這燭火
發出主光輝
幾時我暗無光
主看透徹底
祂於高天俯察
望我光照
你我去朝自家
將真光照
Jesus bids us shine,
First of all for Him;
Well He sees and knows it,
If our light grows dim;
He looks down from heaven,
To see us shine–
You in your small corner,
And I in mine.

點起這燭火
照通遠或近
黑暗重重圍繞
普世罪已深
充斥貪心、悲痛
我當光照
你我去朝自家
將真光照
Jesus bids us shine,
Then, for all around
Many kinds of darkness
In this world are found –
Sin, and want, and sorrow;
So we must shine,
You in your small corner,
And I in mine.