《窗邊雨如大水倒下來》(When You See the Falling Rain)

《稚子的禱聲》之後,是否可重拾譯歌的動力呢?我也不知道。

但前幾天在臉書貼了這首英文兒童詩歌的MV後,真是愛它愛到不得了,將它粵譯的決心就更加大,於是沒理會版權之類的多餘問題就開動了!

由於是首兒歌,不想把它譯得文謅謅的,便加入了大量口語化句式,而且是從前未試過的多。

《窗邊雨如大水倒下來》

Words and Music by S. D. @ biblestorysong.com
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/127

窗邊雨如大水倒下來
沒玩處 可感傷悲?
想想看那雨是有它好處
為著灌漑菜與花與樹
When you see the falling rain outside,
Are you sad that you can’t play?
But just think what good all those drops can do
For the plants and trees that drink that way…

副歌:雨呀雲 邊位製造?
   點點雨串 奇恩充滿
   是上主今天體貼我哋
   神奇地降雨落蒞
   Who has made all the rain clouds?
   That send drip-drops abundantly?
   It is God Who gives us rain today,
   And it comes down wonderf’lly!

清溪 河流 及小川 大湖
並瀑布 深海 汪洋
玩水氹 游池塘 讓我飲啖茶
食飯洗手 瞓覺沖淨涼
Streams and rivers and brooks and lakes,
There are oceans and waterfalls and seas.
We can swim, take a bath, jump in puddles too!
Wash our hands and drink a cuppa tea!

《稚子的禱聲》(Prayer of the Children)

已超過一年沒有做翻譯詩歌的工夫,最近受弟兄所託,為詩班的獻唱,粵譯了這首,希望藉此勉勵會眾,信仰要有對應的社會行動。

但已有詩班員呻苦說歌詞很難唸,不如唱回英文……

《稚子的禱聲》

Words and Music by Kurt Bestor
Arranged by Mark Hayes
粵詞:海牛

參:http://www.jwpepper.com/sheet-music/media-player.jsp?&type=audio&productID=10515355

你可聽得到 那稚子的禱聲
藏斗室一角 暗裡屈膝哀歎抱孤影
每雙空空的眼 再也無淚水可淌
燈火中仰看 望垂聽
Can you hear the prayer of the children?
On bended knee, in the shadow of an unknown room
Empty eyes with no more tears to cry
Turning heavenward toward the light

求援助我 主啊
施恩好使我再見明天朝陽
若我今晚睡去醒不了
我靈請主接收
Crying Jesus, help me
To see the morning light-of one more day
But if I should die before I wake,
I pray my soul to take

你可感觸到 那稚子的心窩
心似家粉碎 已丟失所有那堪追
兩手伸出去 哪有什麼可握緊
惟想有天好過 道別難過
Can you feel the hearts of the children?
Aching for home, for something of their very own
Reaching hands, with nothing to hold on to,
But hope for a better day a better day

求援助我 主啊
家鄉中可與摰愛再一起過
若我迫於遠走他鄉往
寄望藏身於真心愛窩
Crying Jesus, help me
To feel the love again in my own land
But if unknown roads lead away from home,
Give me loving arms, away from harm

(Woh lah dah dah dohm
lah dah lah dah dohm
woh doh doh dah dah dah doh)

你可聽得到 那稚子的呼聲
哀懇低訴 世間分爭盼快止息
發瘋的槍砲 散播仇怨火種
腥風中的濫殺 累成血債
Can you hear the voice of the children?
Softly pleading for silence in a shattered world?
Angry guns preach a gospel full of hate,
Blood of the innocent on their hands

求援助我 主啊
施恩好使我再享陽光溫暖
信當漆黑消失
主將近賜和平新生
Crying Jesus, help me
To feel the sun again upon my face,
For when darkness clears I know you’re near,
Bringing peace again

(Dali cujete sve djecje molitive?)

聽到嗎 聽那稚子禱告
Can you hear the prayer of the children?

《昨日獨想主愛》(Once I Thought the Love of God)

此曲子旋律大路、輕快、動聽又不老套,今早一聽,便很想譯,花了半天,做了這個。

hymnal.net雖把此曲歸類為兒童詩歌,但我以為它(尤其我譯這粵語版本)更適合在青少年崇拜中選唱,不知道有沒機會在公理堂的青崇中唱它呢?

《昨日獨想主愛》

Written by unknown
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/53

昨日獨想主愛只挑選我們臨在
昨日獨想我至得主愛
現在認知主愛當分享遍達四海
獲主愛眷皆主寶貝兒女
噢!主愛暖過最暖日光~
比嘆息一聲溫婉
無限量深遠勝那最深~的海
廣闊像太空
噢!主愛光輝遠勝每一晚
閃照天邊超光星星
從無現世界的東西可將主的愛更改
Once I thought the love of God was just for you and me.
Once I thought we were the only ones.
Now I know God’s love can find all those from sea to sea;
And when it finds them, they become His sons.
God’s love is warmer than the warmest sunshine,
Softer than a sigh.
God’s love is deeper than the deepest ocean,
Wider than the sky.
God’s love is brighter than the brightest star
That shines every night above;
And there is nothing in this world
That can ever change His love.

《今天高興我哋喺一齊》(We Are So Happy We’re Here Today)

今早當我瀏覽到這首短詩時,便想到必列者士街公理堂為幼兒在主日上午所設的Joyful Time課程,不知有沒有主題曲,但覺那歌詞很合用,便寫了這個:

《今天高興我哋喺一齊》

Words by unknown
Music “Glory to His Name” by John Hart Stockton
粵詞:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/71

今天高興我哋喺一齊
學習聖經 禱告 唱歌仔
分享歡笑一起開心唱
這是Joyful Time
這是Joyful Time~~
這是Joyful Time~~
分享歡笑一起開心唱
這是Joyful Time
We are so happy we’re here today.
This time is special in many ways;
So as we gather we gladly say:
Now it’s children’s time.
Now it’s children’s time,
Now it’s children’s time,
This time is special in many ways,
Now it’s children’s time.

《雀鳥在樹頂哼與唱》(The Birds Upon The Tree Tops)

再來一首。始終仍是以創造為題的譯得較得心應手。

《雀鳥在樹頂哼與唱》

Traditional
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/3

雀鳥落力在樹頂哼與唱
天軍日夜在詠歎聲鏗鏘
鮮花豔麗地在公園綻開
你跟我更應歡欣讚頌神
The birds upon the tree tops sing their song;
The angels chant their chorus all day long;
The flowers in the garden blend their hue,
So why shouldn’t I, why shouldn’t you praise Him too?

《神說每句也是真》(Whatever God Says Is True)

剛譯了這首簡單的短詩。我也是今早才第一次聽它。

《神說每句也是真》

Words and Music by unknown
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/40

神說每句也是真
神經手的皆美好
神每個定旨都會成全
神每句也算~數
Whatever God says is true,
Whatever God does is good,
Whatever God plans He carries through,
Whatever God says is true.

《像小鹿》(As The Deer)

認識《As The Deer》這首歌,已是二十多年前的事,它曾令我流過不少感動之淚。

也唱過幾個不同的中譯版本。

幾年前,為這首歌的一個合唱譜做過一個粵譯,但當中只有第一節的歌詞,也沒有正式發表過。

大半年前,動工重新做一個有齊三節的粵譯,但寫來寫去也不太滿意,便擱下了。

因著將要在團契領短崇,本來預備了楊以澤弟兄的版本,才醒覺自己有一個久違了的半製成品,於是帶著新靈感和近月的一些譯詞經驗,兼參考了楊弟兄的版本後,寫成了以下這個版本。

《像小鹿》

Written by Martin J. Nystrom
粵譯:海牛

參:http://youtu.be/bQiP524knbM

像小鹿渴慕純淨溪水
我靈緊跟主腳跟
我多麼渴望朝拜恩主
心裡渴想只有祢
As the deer panteth for the water
So my soul longeth after Thee
You alone are my heart’s desire
And I long to worship Thee
(副歌)

副歌:祢方可賜力量保障
   呈身心遵主旨意至上
   我多麼渴望朝拜恩主
   心裡渴想只有祢
   You alone are my strength, my shield
   To You alone may my spirit yield
   You alone are my heart’s desire
   And I long to worship Thee

是我友伴祢是我兄長
縱然身居天國君
我心中對祢無限愛慕
超過眾事物人情
You’re my friend and You are my brother
Even though You are a King
I love You more than any other
So much more than anything
(副歌)

獨有祢可使我真飽足
榮華珍寶皆看輕
獨有祢可給予我快樂
主乃我真真至愛
I want You more than gold or silver,
Only You can satisfy
You alone are the real joygiver
And the apple of my eye.
(副歌)

《恩主聖臉,天使常可得親見》(His Countenance Angels Can Often Behold 祂的臉面祂的天使)

倪柝聲這名字在中國近代基督教史上很具爭議性,在此不論。

然而,《祂的臉面祂的天使》或《祂的臉面,祂的天使常看見》這首倪柝聲先生的詞作卻令海牛深受感動,當中所表達那為主受苦的心志,是我們這些生活在信仰相對自由的環境之現代信徒所欠缺的;其英文歌詞,同樣動人,至於由誰撰寫,我卻不得而知。

在網上找到一篇這首詩歌的簡介:http://www.churchinmarlboro.org/hymns/hymmary373.htm

做這個粵譯,要兼顧中英兩詞的原意,所花的時間頗長,來來回回也修改了數十次……

《恩主聖臉,天使常可得親見》

中詞:倪柝聲 Watchman Nee
Music by William James Kirkpatrick
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/ch/303
  https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/h/1137

恩主聖臉 天使常可得親見
祂恩愛 卻未可分沾
祂的愛深廣 聖徒銘記在心
不過于今不見聖容
過不久眾聖徒便親睹主臉
得享受主榮光顯現
然馬利亞有幸看到主哭泣
得撫摸祂心中痛處
得撫摸主心裡疼痛
His countenance angels can often behold,
But ne’er taste His love in His grace;
His saints, though they know of His pure, boundless love,
Have never yet once seen His face.
His saints will before long His visage behold,
E’en in His bright glory will share;
But Mary, beholding His tears as He wept,
Could touch His heart’s agony there.
Could touch His heart’s agony there.

恩主真面貌 我們即將相見
今昔也未有此體驗
祂今於我心碎處撫摸治傷
他朝這觸感卻難嘗
那天嘴巴雖頌獻不息歌讚
可已沒再勤懇泣禱
難再得到穿越痛楚的安撫
不見苦境所生信靠
不見苦困所教虔信
We’ll soon see the Lord, as He is, face to face,
We’ll know Him as never before;
But that touch today, healing our broken heart,
In that day will be felt no more.
That day, though our lips offer unceasing praise,
No tears, then, nor prayers fervent burn;
Nor is there the comfort received through much pain,
Nor trust gained through trials to learn,
Nor trust gained through trials to learn.

他朝縱有光輝無比的冠冕
可苦架路亦已行完
主因我受難 苦裡甘美契通
只可今天跟祂共嘗
進安息 我眾自此再沒愁煩
可也沒有時機分擔
與恩主經試煉 替祂遭艱苦
因祂拋開今生暢快
因祂拋棄今世樂暢
Exceeding in glory, that day we’ll be crowned,
Yet there’ll be no cross to obey;
The sweet fellowship of His suff’rings for us
We only can share in today.
Once we’ve that rest entered, no weariness then,
Nor chance will remain to partake
The trials nor the hardships, nor happiness lost,
Nor suffering borne for His sake,
Nor suffering borne for His sake.

噢 跟主共患難時機不多了
跟祂甘受慢侮嘲笑
得祂與共艱苦 蒙福這日子
將於不久一去不回
飽經孤單 鄙視 誤解的悲痛
將再莫見如煙失蹤
這跟主甘美合~一的祝福
主啊 於我珍惜寶貴
主啊 於我珍貴至寶
Oh, chances to suffer for Him are so few,
His shame and derision to bear;
Such blest opportunities soon pass away,
That He in our troubles may share.
All loneliness, misunderstandings and scorn
Despisings and sorrows will flee;
I treasure these blessings, for through them, O Lord,
I enter sweet oneness with Thee,
I enter sweet oneness with Thee.

恩主聖臉 但願能早早得見
跟主見面 樂不可支
今生試煉卻未求給我倖免
因這光陰珍貴亦甜
憐我 憫我 以大愛將我充滿
使我盡獻為主過活
免得我今生切盼他朝天福
他朝追悔卻已錯過
他朝追悔只有恨錯
I long to behold, Lord, Thy countenance soon,
What rapture with Thee, Lord, to meet.
But neither seek I all these trials to avoid;
Such times, Lord, are too rare and sweet.
Have mercy on me, fill me with Thy great love,
For Thee, Lord, to live at all cost;
Lest Thy servant, hoping for that blessed day,
That day, regret chances were lost,
That day, regret chances were lost.

《來看哪,父神賜我眾的愛》(Behold What Manner of Love)

《Behold What Manner of Love》是一首洗腦級的短詩,歌詞取材自約翰壹書3:1,可以不斷的重唱、輪唱,三十多年來,在坊間卻似乎還未見有一個粵譯版本,海牛一直也有把它翻譯的念頭,卻苦無靈感,今午又在hymnal.net遇見它,花了個多小時,就做了這個:

《來看哪,父神賜我眾的愛》

Written by Patricia Van Tine
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/ns/323

來看哪 父~神賜我眾的愛多深又多長
來看哪 父~神賜我眾的愛多高多廣闊
我竟跟你得稱上帝(或上主)親兒
我竟跟你得稱祂子女
Behold what manner of love
 The Father has given unto us,
Behold what manner of love
 The Father has given unto us,
That we should be called the sons of God,
That we should be called the sons of God.