試把Jill Jackson Miller and Sy Miller寫於1955年的這首《Let There be Peace on Earth》翻譯成粵詞,遇著最大的困難是如何翻出作者灌入歌詞中那「創世」的類比。作者用了英文聖經中上帝在創世時說話的句式:「Let there be…」若由英文直譯就會是「讓……有」那可不同於中文聖經的譯法:「要……有」若用在歌詞上,前者在語氣上比較貼近和平的題旨,而後者則顯得過於自我。
吊詭的地方就在這裡,當人看重自我,世上便難有和平;但偏偏和平的第一步,又需要每一個「我」願意把自我放低,由「我」做起,才能開創和平的局面。
Anyway,譯詞就是有這麼多的限制啦!若沒有那創造的靈的感動,是很難有「看著是好的」結果……
《世間要有和平》
Written by Jill Jackson Miller and Sy Miller
粵譯:海牛參:http://www.midi-karaoke.info/210677c1.mid
我要自我開始
世間重新有和平
祈求全地再享
真真平靜與安穩
同尊慈愛父神
手足相~親
我來伴您偕行
同譜協和歌韻
Let there be peace on earth
And let it begin with me.
Let there be peace on earth
The peace that was meant to be.
With God as our Father
Brothers all are we.
Let me walk with my brother
In perfect harmony.我要自這天起
樂與神開創和平
猶如盟誓決心
獻我全力我光陰
而我要每日
永帶愛與睦
去過去活這生
世上終見和平
這天從我開~創
(求讓~我開~創)
Let peace begin with me
Let this be the moment now.
With every step I take
Let this be my solemn vow.
To take each moment
And live each moment
With peace eternally.
Let there be peace on earth,
And let it begin with me.
Can I have your permission to lead this song with your lyrics in a church service?
Thank you.
please accept my apology for this late reply.
for sure you can sing my translated lyrics in your church service.